Place Your Poetry Here!

[Small town]

[Dragon Writer]

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[kk]

Wow, I haven't been on this topic in like, forever!

yr: I will now eternally remember this line:

Our lives are weird, our homes are too,

But we're still happy,

How about you?

That's just awesome, yr.

[Dragon Writer]

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[Mel]

I know I am waay behind the times, but eowyngirl: you simply rock! I love your poems! I think they're the best I've read in a while. It's weird, I understand exactly what you're talking about...(except for Black Monday, I'm so sorry). Alter Ego? Yes! Distant Shores? Yes! Alive? Yes! It's so bizarre! Wow, I dunno what to say!


okay....YR: "man eating plum pudding" ...interesting....XD very nice.


Okay, so I'm not sure I why I didn't put this up before, but I really have a lot of fun reading this one out loud. It's not really from my p.o.v., just so you know. I had to write it for class, and I had a fun time thinking of a story to go along with it. It's supposed to be funny, so don't take it too seriously. And, think perhaps Helena and Demetrius if you need a little help, :P

"The Almost Anti-Sonnet"

Love is just a stupid game for no ones
Who happen to like falling, down hills
and such and the like. Why, I am so cun-
ning that I'd never fall for such frills!
Who would want to be constantly nervous?
I'm just saying it seems stupid.
Sometimes doe eyes make me want to cuss
or string up that old farty fool Cupid.
To have someone know you so completely --
wouldn't life get trite and old and boring?
To have heartbreak skip and fly so fleeting
likea tiny fishing boat lost its mooring--
No, I have nothing against eternal grief.
Besides, who wants loving words from a thief?

:P And that is that. I have another sonnet but it was written in earnest and is so horribly pathetic that I cannot put it up, so I hope you'll be content with this. :P

EDIT: and don't worry YR. Sometimes having a valentine is much worse. They're not all they're cracked up to be.

Dai all!

[Dragon Writer]

Ah, but that's the thing: I LIKE love...Love poems are my specielty! Didn't you notice that almost all the poems i wrote end with hope, or love, in the end? :P Everyone else can write depressing things...Me, i just want to point out that there's always hope.
(ANd i needed a rhym...plum pudding worked. :P)

[Lady Rhiannon]

Huh, I don't remember seeing this topic. But then then, I haven't been on in, oh forever.

I don't know how many of you know what filk is, but I'm trying to write a YW song. My writing partner's not much help, as she hasn't read the books (I'm trying, I'm trying). But I thought I might post the (tentative) chorus on her efor your reading enjoyment.

Here is the challenge, the choice and the fight:
Did I do good, did I do right?
Life's own defiance, 'til all our worlds end
Come into the magic, my partner, my friend

It's a work in progress...

[alla]

Sounds good, Lady Rhi Is there a tune that you're basing it on? Or are you writing the music to go with it as well?

I did a couple of YW filks to the tunes of various Christmas carols. On checking, I had even put them into a thread, which can be found over here: YW Filk. We even have a YW filk thread. I know mine are kinda corny, and I've tried to write a better one, but I haven't managed so far.

[Lady Rhiannon]

Ooo, I didn't even think to search for a filk thread (that's what I get for being gone so long--I forget the basics! ).

But, yes, I'll be writing the tune as well. Though I usually leave the music writing to my filk partner in crime, who's got much more of a talent for it than I have.

*wanders over to the filk thread*

[Kathy Li]

Just in case, I unlocked the Filk thread. I'm afraid, I'm not much one for the filking, but I believe that Garrett has committed filk in the past. Sadly, most of the filk I know is computer-related (e.g., "Do It Yourself")

[Daylily]

Save Darfur
They have
sorrow pain
tears screams
Save Darfur
China is
not acting
to help
Save Darfur
one world
one dream
china make
this true
you must
Save Darfur
but to
be fair
we aren't
helping much
Save Darfur
last time
this happened
six-million
people dead
Save Darfur
every one
can help
The world's
problem is
Our problem
Save Darfur
we are
the Children
we are
not Different
across the
world we
all Breathe
the same
Air we
Drink we
Eat we
fear Nightmares
the Unknown
and Death
Children of
the world
rejoice and
raise your
eyes to
the heavens
because pandora
never lost
our hope

-written by me, during Sosial Studies in 10 minuets whilst learning about Darfur.

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[Cress]

Ok...so I don't exactly have any finished poetry, but I have pieces of poems that I would really like feedback on.

Poem 1
Don't wake me,
Please don't wake me
Oblivion has taken me
And life's too long you see
So just let me lie and sleep

I can't face every second pressing at the back of my eyes
But when my lids are closed I can't remember, time flies
Confusion is sparking in my sights
And I'm swaying on my feet
My days are flashing past, can't make sense, ends don't meet
So don't wake me
Please don't wake me

Poem 2
My innocence is here in this simplicity of phrases
But my thought, my feelings lost in a maelstrom of mazes
Please don't judge these lines
I'm writing out my truth
But if pretty lies are all you want
Move on to the next booth

Poem 3
I'm blurring at the edges
Losing myself to sleep
Piece by piece I fall away
So soft you can hear me weep
Under the broken sky light
I watch the clearing skies
And sometimes I wonder
Who hears the sun when it cries?

It's too late,
And I'm wrestling fate
I'll never choose

Suspended between love and joy,
tears and hate
I have to choose

[Mel]

Cress, I'm impressed with the expression and, though it sounds a little ironic, the clarity of your poems. The first poem is such a human feel, but you set it in such, ehnn... I don't know, descriptive doesn't seem quite right, but you get the point-- such a lucid way. Very nice

Poem 2: I like this phrase a lot, I think you have something here : "My innocence here is in the simplicity of phrases"

Poem 3 sounds sort of blurry and soft at the beginning, but the ending feels a little jarring and clear cut which is sort of cool.


My only advice is to edit; a little less words to clean it up.

And that's my two cents, hahaha take what you will and do with it as you please

Edit: So now I have my own poem up open for scrutiny. (please be absolutely honest) This is what comes of too much candy, Sisterhood 2, Flogging Molly, and midnight. Heh heh But nonetheless it's a bout friendship *aww*

"Looking Out"

four boats
boats for
lapping up against the shore

run out
out run
fly to the deap ocean

stay tight
tightly stay
promise you won't go away

fish deep
deep fish
I will bring my sweetest dish

wind sun
sun wins
we will always meet ag'in

four, five
five for
I'll be there forever more

[Emi]

So um... does a song count as a poem? Well if it does, here it is:

Takes Something

Walking through the empty woods
Searching for something, I don't know
But when I find it, I'll know.
Because when I find it, my heart will beat...
Again.

And you know that takes something...
And what I'm looking for,
Could it possibly be you?

Because, every time I look at you
My heart starts to jump
Every time I see you smile
Warmth fills me up
Every time you hold my hand
I feel so alive...

I stumble across a vast meadow
Filled with grass and open skies
I look around, it seems so empty
But to my surprise, my heart starts to beat...
Again.

And you know that takes something...
And what I see out there,
Could it possibly be you?

Because, every time I look at you
My heart starts to jump
Every time I see you smile
Warmth fills me up
Every time you hold my hand
I feel so alive...

You don't know how you effect me
You say I have a way with charm,
But yours is so much stronger
Whenever I look in your eyes
I forget about everything around me
I forget about who I am inside.

And you know that takes something...

Every time I look at you
My heart starts to jump
Every time I see you smile
Warmth fills me up
Every time you hold my hand
I feel so alive...

And you know that takes something...

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I wrote it for a fanfic because I didn't feel like using a real song. What do you guys think?

EDIT: Just had to fix a few parts of the song that was bugging me. No biggie. I'm trying to put music to the song... if I get it down do you think I could post it on here? I don't know what site hosts... sounds. Haha.

[kk]

I like it Emi!

I haven't written a poem in a while...I need to do that...I really really should...hmmmmph...