Place Your Poetry Here!

[Mel]

Ooh, GM, I realllllly like that last one you just posted, "Thinking Spot." It's so much like the woods surrounding my house, and it is a perfect spot and I realllly like it it's such a beautiful poem. And I like the one before it too. To catch up...
EDIT: Sorry, I was writing this at my friend's house and just at this point, my dad decides to show up, so...

To catch up, Cress, I think I didn't do your poems justice before, and now that I truly read them, with not just my eyes but my brain and heart, I really like them. I have a few of the same thoughts, methinks.

I also like that haiku Kate wrote. Short, sweet, and simple. Good.

I like the message of Max's poem, though it isn't my style. (Gah, I spelled style wron like six times.How does that happen??!!)

I agree, YR, that insanity one is rather odd. Effective, nonetheless.

Olivia: XD

Peri: That reminds me of this story I read, it's actually an ongoing online diary of my mom's co-worker's daughter who is went to Russia to adopt a boy name Musat, who they are renaming Liam. If you really want to, I could ...I dunno, mail it to you. It's a good story, and it's still going as we type!
But the poem is uber cute.

ok, ag: I like that haiku. The long poem has some interesting thoughts in there.

Ok, I think that's it for now. Sorry if my post seemed incomplete...but that's probably because it was, heh.
Dai, guys

[Gatemage Stardragon]

Years of Death

[Gatemage Stardragon]

Thinking spot

Shaded by trees
Sit on the rock
A perfect thinking spot
Off of the water
A cool breeze may blow
Echoing perfection
From the lake
Shafts of sunlight
Golden and green
Flowers stand by
Near the edge
Silence
Still
Perfection

[Gatemage Stardragon]

Power

[Cress]

Ag-yours seem really heartfelt. Meaningful...I know life can seem crappy a lot of the time, but write a happy poem once in a while.

But seriously, I really like yours.

Peri-I really like the imagery in yours, you know how to use the right words.
Olivia-CUUUUUUUUTE! I lurve it.
YR-I like the idea behind yours. It kind of makes you giggle, but then think for a second afterwards. Well said!
Max-go political poetry. Great way to use the art for expression...I feel like an english teacher, but I really do love giving people feedback. Anyway, I think this poem would really benefit if you formatted it in a cool way. It would make certain words stand out a lot more.
KK-that's beautiful. Sometimes a short poem can be the best way to say things, yet still really hard to find the right words. Good job!

OK chillins, if your poem came before the last time I posted and you haven't gotten feedback and you really want some just point it out, and I'd looooooooooove to tell you what i think. I'm loud like that. Ta!

[Mel]

Ok guys, I got one that relates to the holiday (sort of):

"Maple" or maybe "Birch" I can't decide...

Burnt sky tumbles to meet
a concrete skyway; highway.
it goes, speeding through limb and life,
A joy can compensate
for undeniable
sorrow.
But it will help the sea to grow
the sea of
textbook
cell
green.
It flutters and sighes one last time
into my open window
I press it to my heart, then smile;
Autumn leaves make my day.

[agfish92]

i got bored in la. so i wrote them. im bored. so ill shall type them. p.s. im not this werid. am i?
p.s.s i am aware that i cant spell for beans.

the littaral sence of dieing is un-true,
you die well before your body does,
your soal burns far before you leave this world,
and it does beacuse of our family and friends desert you well before your dead,
you can be dead at birth and live till your 100l
the deffinition of death is not quite allways literal,
when your friends, family, everyone deserts you,
than you are truly dead,
like me


im trying to think,
trying to beleve,
trying to love,
trying to be me.
but should i have to try to be myself,
or should it come naturaly,
like a baby knowing to breath.
your sufficating me,
not letting me free,
till i snap like a twig.
and when you burry me,
try not to pretend to cry,
if those tears were real,
then why am i here?


jeliosy kills,
tears,
breaks,
friendships and love.

why can't i lie to your?
pretend what i said is true,
is it beacuse i love you?
do i even know what love is?

[agfish92]

mk.. i know i havent been to this topic much recently. but i dont know. so this poem means alot to me even though its only 3 sentences.

tears falling from my eyes,
my makeup's smering,
my heart's tearing.

[Dragon Writer]

NIce poems...*is still weirded out by the fact that i wrote a weird poem, and must get back to sharkwater anyways, so can't post any more* see you! hah! no one liners for me! *cheers and runs off*

[the_peridexis]

That, Olivia.

Was brilliance in word form. XD But now I've got Chain Hang Low stuck in my head AGAIN...okay, okay, a poem...

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Baby

Chocolate brown brown eyes, smile up at me,
And pansy-hued cheeks, with skin so petal-soft.
Little wobbling feet walk hesitantly, then


Many tiny fingers wrap fast aroung my one.
My strong arm around his still so fragile,
Holding him aloft for as long as need be.
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I thought it was really cute, but I couldn't think of a suitable tite. I got the inspiration from one of my mom's adorable babysitting clients. :P AND I made that up on the spot, so not bad, right? Oh, and don't forget to criticize the poem I last posted PLEEEEEASE! And this one too, if you'd be so kind.

-peri

[Olivia]

I made up a song at my mountain house, and I think I'll post it, even if it's childish and short. It's to the tune of that nursery song "Do Your Ears Hang Low?"

Are your fingers cold?
Were you playing in the snow?
Can you move them at all? Can you move them to and fro?
Are they red, are they numb, can you even use your thumb?
Are your fingers cold?

*bows dramatically*

[Dragon Writer]

ok, here's a weird one...or weird for me anyways.

People are crazy,
insanitys here,
stretching its claws,
grinning from ear to ear,
insanitys coming,
for us all,
and there's no hiding,
none at all,
you can run,
or you can embrace,this insanity that those of this world do face,
me, i do say embrace,
for insanity makes the world go round,
unless i'm crazy, this principle is sound,
yes, insanity makes the world go round,
and sanity only brings us down.

wrote it while walking three blocks to store...hope you like it.

[Dragon Writer]

VERY good poem...*grabs life by the horns and throws it at writer* sorry, still sore about the online dating thing...
don't actually mean the throwing thing, but i want to see if you reemmber me max, or should i say...Lord_Dashiell ok...that was overly dramatic. anyways, i knew i recognized that poem...I had seen it from you on the other site...I"m dragon writer there...Unless you two just wrote the same exact poem somehow in which case i'm really embarresed and highly suspsicious...

[Max]

Life is presious, so grab it by the horns. Are you going to move on? Or be the one who moruns. Bad things will happen, so put them in the past, good things come along, you want to make those last. No matter what race, religion or sex, life is yours to hold. It's caly in the sculptors hands, for you to shape and mould. You can make your choices, they happen everyday. You can choose. Wether you're straight bi or gay. No discrimination, can make you half or less, humans don't take orders, in fact it's what we do best. If sometyhing's going on now, that's really really bad, tkae it in the face, don't let it make you sad. You can simmer on something, but before very long, you're going to think that it's time to move on. It's all your choice, don't let others shape your life. Or else. So, have you decided to be the one who mourns, or that life is indeed presious, so that you'll grab it by the horns.

[kk]

haiku of wizardry

Wizardry is real
magic is loose in the world
but moonlight follows...