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[Cress]

Mel-by meter I meant the rhyme scheme and the flow of the poem...the rhythm that it has. I really liked it. It has a groove.

Uh oh, we seem to be having a poot attack.

[Poliester]

[Poliester]

Oops! That one poem was on my signature! hehe I forgot...

[Dragon Writer]

They're GOOD! i don't usually have enough time to read poems here in my mad dash of posting, but i decided i might as well start...and as far as resolution beginnings can start, that was a pretty good one...

[agfish92]

[Dragon Writer]

wait...*is slightly confused by the use of grandson and son since you're fourtien, but huggles ariel non the less for her saddness and wonders who the heck this other kevin is* Ok, off to other topics...talk to you later ariel...*is still confused*

[jwiz]

oh, that was a great poem!!!! i'm sorry for the loss and hope you feel better.

[mythbusterfan]

I spent awhile reading back a few pages on this, and all I can say is...wow...

here's my newest one. I wrote it not even 10 minutes ago.

Straight and True.

on this clear and lonely night,
the dark is filled with scattered light,
from moon and stars,
to dawns first light,

stars on high, they speak to me,
they tell me what i cannot see,
through the sky their message flies,
destroying darkness and all it's lies.

like eyes above they watch our life,
and watch as we spend our time on strife,
once again we have gone astray,
and travelled hence, from the path of day.

stumbled into dark's deep lair,
of rocket filled skies, and smoky air.
debri and blood clog the grounds,
and the fields are filled with burial mounds.

what can we do to escape this fate?
turn back now when it's not too late!
before this war fills our homes with tears,
and our lives are ruled by constant fears.

this is what they say to me,
and what i pass to you,
a way for us all to be,
on a path that's straight and true.

[luv2read]

[the_peridexis]

Mythy...wow. I love it. That's amazing. Really. Just..wow.

Alexandra (do you have a nick I could use?) that's a cool storyline.

And here's one that's still going to need some work; it's based on a chrater from the books I've just finished, called Twilight and New Moon (I <3 them):

Inhuman. You've never seen anything lovlier, that moves with such utter, impossible grace.


Cold. Distant, angry, sleek a velvet snarl in the back of my mind, warning me, wanting me safe.


Gentle. Handling me delicately, like no human ever could; hands that could so easily break me.


Fierce. Burning topaz eyes, far too haunting to be quite real, protective, insatiable, loving.

Untouchable. Unsure. Frightened. Obsessed. Ancient. Powerful. Helpless.

A savior. A killer. A lover. A future. An end. A beginning. An angel. A monster.

I could never live without him.

-peri

Like it? It's supposed to ne haunting, but I'm not sure if I got that. Lots of ctiticism please.

[marina salem]

wow, peri... it's so powerful. i like that there's no definitive rhyme scheme. i have no criticism...criticise this:

The life I dance is lonely and hard
There are many groups, but I have no team
I dance to see, to hear, to laugh
And, more important, I dance to dream

I dream of beauty, adventure, song
Of a love that lasts all life long
I dream of acceptance and an interesting fate
For which I work willingly, willing to wait

My dreams are much more real to me
Than the sweetest sugar, than the sting of a bee
Than the hottest flame, than a lime so tart
Than a cold steel blade plunged straight to my heart

How can I love, and be loved in return
If I don't live on this earth
My lonely dance, my lonely life and death
Were meant for me from birth

like I said...criticise this!

[agfish92]

Thanks you guys.. i havent wrote many poems since that one. i do miss him so much.so i will try.

My heart has been crushed so many times,
my soal has been pushed till the clif,
my body has blead in so many different spots,
all for this thing they call love,
but i dont beleve in love,
love isent real,
is it?...

i couldent be,
but yet i seem to not be able to keep him off my mind,
i cant do this,
i cant "love".
it cant be true.
i dont love you,
do i?

[samehl]

I'M FLYING
(sorry guys spelling might kind of be bad, feel free to correct or comment, I just wrote this because I don't have my poems with me)
My heart stops as I take the stage,
My breath stops as I hear the beat,
My brain freezes as I take the first step,
But I jump into that jump!
And then my body takes over.
All in your head is the steps,
not what you ate for lunch
Or if your boyfriend still likes you,
Or if that not-true rumor about you
Got to your best friend.
All that is there is the steps,
All the anger is left in the dance,
the glorious leap,
the fabulous jump,
the graceful dance,
my dance
of life.
I step out onto the dance floor.
my. heart. stops.
I take the first step.
my. brain. leaps.
I hear the first beat.
And I'm flying.

[Cress]

PERI! I love those books! I think you captured it so well, especially using phrasing that seemed to come from the books. You brought it all together really well.
Great rhyme schemes everyone!!!!!!! I'm so jealous, mine are always terrible...

[Gatemage Stardragon]

Okay!! New poemer!

Connection

I didn't know anyone
They started to tease me
No one knew me,
I thought no one would help me
Then someone came along
She told everyone off
Then she grabbed my hand
And she helped me up
And asked if I was okay
I pushed the hat back over my head
To cover it
To hide my lack of hair
She smiled
"I had it too
If you ever need help,
I'll be there for you"
I thanked her,
In shock
I watched her walk away
And thought of her as my sister